Generally clear pronunciation, you were biting your words. There was appropriate rhythm and pace. Pauses was not intentionally used, pitch and tone does not convey the emotions well. No power was heard in your voice.
Please submit in the proper format (.m4a or .mp3), not .aifc. Use Quicktime to record.I was not able to listen to the recording due to the file format. iTunes failed to play it.
Nice expression with good rhythm. However, for some parts of the poem, you did not pronounced it with emotion.